This is really something. You included some really meaty stuff. I love thos whole new approach -- Jack and Elizabeth trying to share Will, instead of incessant sharing of Elizabeth. I really loved their verbal battle, and their sharing of some home truths. I think that this is the best part of how these characters could interact: being frank about each others darker sides and regrets.
I also think you did a bang-up job with ELizabeth. You write her as strong, but flawed. You are aware of her strenghts and weaknesses, and you don't protray her as some all-powerful Sea Goddess, but as someone who is trying to do her best and is capable of screwing up, which makes sense!
I also think that it is really important to include the class distinctions. After all these years, she would have to have gained some insight once she had achieved some distance from her younger self.
Anyway, I think others have left more eloquent feedback, but that's kind of my visceral reaction. More!
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Date: 2008-07-08 06:53 am (UTC)I also think you did a bang-up job with ELizabeth. You write her as strong, but flawed. You are aware of her strenghts and weaknesses, and you don't protray her as some all-powerful Sea Goddess, but as someone who is trying to do her best and is capable of screwing up, which makes sense!
I also think that it is really important to include the class distinctions. After all these years, she would have to have gained some insight once she had achieved some distance from her younger self.
Anyway, I think others have left more eloquent feedback, but that's kind of my visceral reaction. More!