Drabble: "Abandoned"

[veronica_rich]

Title: Abandoned
Rating: G
Character: Davy Jones
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters; I make no profit. Just exercise.
Summary: The captain of the Flying Dutchman goes to his Maker. For the prompt "Fool" at blackpearlsails.


A fool for love.

If only that was how history would paint me. He knew better than to expect reprieve from the surviving progeny of terrified seamen and damned ocean travelers, left behind scribbling on parchment and whispering fiercely into grimy ears on dark wharves the terrifying monstrosity of Davy Jones’s reign.

It wasn’t the sucking inward spiral of collapse in his breast making him shrink in pain. It was the lad, not unlike the once-young sailor David, also breathing his last. Turner had two who sacrificed for him.

Jones had been unable to rely upon only one.

“Calypso …”

Comments

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

> Turner had two who sacrificed for him.

Jones had been unable to rely upon only one. <

I hadn't thought of that before. Yes, the comparison is rather sad.

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Wow, you packed a lot of imagery in just a few lines. Brava!

[yoiebear.livejournal.com]

Again - wonderful.

[venusinchains.livejournal.com]

I do feel sorry for Jones, as twisted as he is. You really can't help who you love.

Beautifully done. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Very true! Davy Jones is such a tragic figure, and you really caught that, here.

[justawench.livejournal.com]

I have a soft spot for Davy. I like how it seems he is a bit of a victim, too.

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

Beautiful drabble. I loved the ending. Very brilliant.

[danglingdingle.livejournal.com]

This got me once again thinking how terribly futile Davy's act of cutting out his heart really was.

I mean, it did next to nothing to ease the pain he did it for in the first place, and he was walking at the end of the leash held by the one he loved, (or loves...)the very leash he tried to cut in the first place, so he basically ended up with all the problems he had before, and then some and a load.

I love the angsty tentacle-face for being such a tragic and dramatic figure. Endless hours of angsty fun :)

Thanks for using Davy for this prompt, and for doing it so well. He deserves it.

[ainsoph15.livejournal.com]

Ah, how perfectly you convey heartbreak, without even having to use the word itself - the very physicality of the pain of it. Love, loss, regret, jealousy, anguish; they're all conveyed here so poignantly. Well done as always, darling.

[captsparrow4evr.livejournal.com]

Sorry I didn't comment before, love. I seem to have developed some cold-like thing that is currently ruining my life.

Anyway, this was very powerful as a short piece like this should be. Not a word was misplaced--which is probably the best compliment you can get for a drabble.;) IMO, Davy expected his goddess to live up to a human standard of perfection. Mythology is full of gods and goddesses demonstrating faithlessness and lies. Because she wasn't human, she couldn't be a perfect one.

Will, otoh, loves Elizabeth as she is, not for being perfect. With any luck, that will keep his fate from echoing Captain Jones'.