Bit of what I have of "Deny"

I'm now working on my sixth story in "Contradictions," which is called, predictably enough off the last chapter, "Deny.

I have definite plans I'm not going to reveal for after this part - they will hopefully be a bit of a surprise for the reader - but I've started the story and wanted people's thoughts on the matter, should they wish to give them.


( Rough draft beginning of Deny )

If you see mistakes, or grand errors, or a point of order, please let me know.